She hesitantly took a step into the room. There was so much clutter everywhere and it wasn't hers. Boxes half-full, completely empty, or totally full were stacked haphazardly against the dresser. She looked to the wall that was with the door and noticed the the desk had been moved. All her pictures or posters had been torn down. She made her way across the room to the bookshelf and scanned it's contents. She noticed that her books and school work were missing. They were either packed or tossed. Tossed she thought more likely.
It hurt to be in this room. This used to be hers - and now? Now it was someone else's. The room used to be warm and inviting but now it was so cold. She laughed, cold like the new owner. She made her way to the closet and looked in. Someone else's clothes now lined the closet. She wrinkled her nose in disgust. She didn't like closets. With one last look around the room she sighed. It was such a beautiful room - now it was a disaster. They completely removed any sign that she had once lived in the room. It was a sign, they had completely removed any sign or memory of her. So this is how they wanted to be? Fine. If they didn't want to treat her things with respect then obviously they didn't want to treat her with respect. She grabbed her only box of things and left. Her heart ached as she closed the door to her old bedroom.
I think you've captured how hard this experience would be. I wouldn't want someone to pack for me like that. Also, I love the contrasts you've used which really add to the way this story feels. As in your statement here:
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Great contrasts! Nice job!
Thanks. This has happened to me more times than I can count so it wasn't hard to write down the feelings. I'm glad you like it though :) I always worry about my writing!
ReplyDeleteI had a total deja vu moment reading this - have you read Kerri's entry for the first Ink Notes exercise? It's here: http://poprocksculture.blogspot.com/2009/07/ink-notes-1.html
ReplyDeleteShe talks about the same thing. Or at least something really similar. For a second, I was confused, haha! I suppose this is sort of an experience we all have at one point or another.